Mirror: Are we going to crap all over this one like we did with the Creepypasta Land Wiki?
Dorkpool: I have no idea. Let’s see what the future brings.
Mirror: Alrighty. So today’s Riff is from the Spinpasta Wiki?
Dorkpool: Yep. Though it wouldn’t surprise me if it was on the Creepypasta Land Wiki.
Mirror: That bad?
Dorkpool: Well, let’s knock on doors and Riff this bitch find out.
Has anyone heard of the Vocaloid singer SeeU, well there is a song called Hide and Seek, now on YouTube there is a video, but I believe this truly happened.
Dorkpool: (Narrator): As you can tell, I’m delusional.
Their was a sickness at one point that no one understood,
Mirror: Similar to this story.
but this one family would soon find out the meaning. There was a knock on the door, as it echoed through the house a voice followed the sound of the knock and said "I will find you, no use hiding."
Dorkpool: Sheesh, the Jehovah’s Witnesses are getting really pushy.
Now the mother understood what he wanted, he wanted them to take his illness. She ran to lock the door only to discover the door was already opening. She pushed against the door and told her son and daughter to go into hiding.
Mirror: (Narrator): The kids, being in a rebellious teenager phase, decided not to.
The kids were scared, but they did as they were told.
The little girl went into her room and hid under her bed, but the boy didn't hide, he ran throughout the house.
Dorkpool: (Narrator): He died pretty quickly.
He didn't want to hide, he had to find his mom, then at that moment he heard a scream, this scream belong to his mother. Tears streamed down his face, the tears started to blur his vision and he tried to run through it. Then a voice said it a feminine voice "No use hiding I will find you."
Mirror: I guess Zod has a sex change/
He nearly froze with fear, but he kept running. That voice belonged to his mother not that man at the door...
The little boy continue running and trying to find a place to hide, then he heard a scream coming from his sister's room. The scream belong to his sister, but again the voice of the new person was his sister. He continued running, then he ran into his bedroom (knowing his sister would look under the bed). So he hid in the closet.
Dorkpool: You know, maybe this story is actually just a metaphor for coming out of the closet.
His sister came into his room saying "Knock... Knock...
I'm here... Are you under the bed?" His heart skipped a beat and his breath steadied, but it wasn't long until she said "Oh, I see you're not under there. How about in the closet?"
Dorkpool: (Sister): You can come out of the closet, I’ll accept you.
His heart skipped a beat; as the closet door let in a streak of light and he saw his sister grinning a unnatural grin and her eyes were as black as night. Then there was a scream.
Mirror: (Narrator): The boy left his horror movie on.
There were 3 bodies found in that house, a man's, a mother's, and a little girl's. Each were strangled, but their bodies seemed to have move from where they were to have died from.
Dorkpool: Being taken to the morgue has that effect.
This case is still not solved. There is no sign of the boy. If you ever hear a voice saying "Knock Knock I'm here to find you." Don't go to the door.
Mirror: (Narrator): Instead, shoot the person behind the door.
Hid and never come out. There seems to be a knocking... "Knock Knock, I'm coming for you." Never go near the door.
Dorkpool: (Narrator): Stay in your room and never leave your house.
Dorkpool: This story sucks. A lot.
Mirror: It’s rather confusing, and that’s mostly due to bad writing. The grammar really makes this story confusing. I mean, the first sentence alone already confuses you, and not in the good "I want to know more" way. No, it’s confusing in the "what in the multiple rings of hell is this person trying to say" way. That’s a huge problem. Outside of that, there are other flaws. The characters aren’t developed, and the beginning sentence makes no sense if you don’t know the song. Hell, I had to look up the lyrics for it to see what the hell the writer met. By the way, the song lyrics are better than this story. (Here’s a link for anyone who’s curious: http://vocaloidlyrics.wikia.com/wiki/%EC%88%A8%EB%B0%94%EA%BC%AD%EC%A7%88_%28Sumbakkokjil%29)
Dorkpool: There are good things. Based on the song lyrics, I can kind of see what the writer was going for: a Creepypasta version of a song. Not a bad goal, and the story itself is pretty accurate to the song. Also, despite having terrible grammar, the spelling isn’t terrible. And the story itself is short, so it’s a drag to read. It still isn’t good though. But that’s what we think. What do you guys think? Was the story good? Was the Riff good? Was the song good? Do you wish someone would knock on our door? Leave your thoughts in the comments below.